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Does this sound and look right? Posted by everlastes on 9 Jan 2012 at 10:22 PM
I am making this essay right now and i really SUCK AT GRAMMAR AND TENSE D:
maybe its because english is not my first language. sigh.

thank you :(

Hisses and groans fills my senses as my flaring limbs constrict against tight leathery skins. My cries and pleas resound from the dark abyss that I am being drag into, and I find myself struggling for freedom. Suddenly, my heart stutters in my bloody chest as realization dawns on me. This is a place where souls can no longer find redemption and forgiveness can never be obtained. Here, no light can erase the sins from my previous life, and I know at that moment that this is Hell.


Finally, realization dawns on me, and I stop fighting. I know at that moment on I deserve everything that I am experiencing right now, and that it is foolish to stop my ill fate. If only I have treated others with reverence and kindness, then maybe I would not be here facing my worst nightmares. And because of my past faults, I come to accept my fate. Giving my last prayer to God, I allow myself to be fully eaten by my sins and the Devil.


OH AND IS IT " My cries and pleas resound from the dark abyss that I am being DRAG into, and I find myself struggling for freedom." or do i use the word "DRAGGED"

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everlastes Does this sound and look right? on 9 Jan 2012 at 10:22 PM



 

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